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Post by Carina Jones on Dec 19, 2011 0:07:50 GMT -5
One thing
south to Sund, and east to Queast. Elena leapt out from the trees. “This way!” She grabbed Angel’s arm and pulled her down one path. “East to Queast!” Sean, who had tumbled out after his younger sister, pulled Angel the other way. “No! South to Snud!”
Other than that, very good. I like the "queen" xD
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Post by Sadiq Adnan on Dec 19, 2011 0:09:17 GMT -5
I love it! I can believe Francis as the red queen. So excited to see who the mad hatter is!!
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Post by Angelica Vargas-Jones on Dec 19, 2011 0:17:18 GMT -5
Huh? I don't get it Kit-kat...But I'm glad you like the queen.
x3 soon, soon. Although you guys probably won't be all that surprised. But then again, you might be...
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Post by Sadiq Adnan on Dec 19, 2011 0:19:24 GMT -5
I'll probably be suprised. I'm not good a guessing stuff like this.
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Post by Carina Jones on Dec 19, 2011 0:19:39 GMT -5
Sund vs. Snud You have two different spellings of where the south leads.
I'll probably be surprised because I'm not guessing. xD
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Post by Angelica Vargas-Jones on Dec 19, 2011 0:21:20 GMT -5
*shrugged* When you think about it, my choice will make sense.
I know, I saw. I didn't realize it when I was reading it over because word says both are wrong...
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Post by Carina Jones on Dec 19, 2011 0:22:03 GMT -5
*nods* I understand that happens. ^-^ That's the only thing I picked up.
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Post by Sadiq Adnan on Dec 19, 2011 0:22:23 GMT -5
I'm trying to think of who would fit as the mad hatter and I'm drawing a blank, so I'll be suprised
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Post by Feliciano Vargas on Dec 19, 2011 0:30:55 GMT -5
...Why did the rabbit 've' so much? *curious*
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Post by Angelica Vargas-Jones on Dec 19, 2011 1:04:35 GMT -5
The rabbit was suppose to be fem!Vene. That's why she says 've' so much. Oh no, did I over do it with the 've'? I was trying to not put to many in, but not to little at the same time....
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Post by Feliciano Vargas on Dec 19, 2011 1:34:19 GMT -5
No, you didn't overdo it, I was just wondering... So, fem!Vene... *nods* Interesting indeed. Will there be any signs of our poor deceased Vene, or no?
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Post by Angelica Vargas-Jones on Dec 19, 2011 1:38:53 GMT -5
*sigh of relief* ok. Yep, fem!Vene. Signs of our poor deceased Vene? It depends. He'll be mentioned in the story, but you'll, most likely, never actually see him...
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Post by Feliciano Vargas on Dec 19, 2011 1:51:04 GMT -5
XD Don't worry, I've unfortunately become an expert on 've'ing at the right moments so as to not sound over-'ve'ing and you were fine~ Are you going to have Angelica notice and acknowledge any similarities between Vene and the White Rabbit, so as to help the reader realize that it's fem!Vene beyond the 've'ing? Ah, that's what I thought. *nods* It's sad, I would have loved to see Vene somewhere in this world that I think he'd have fun in, but with the script I'm pretty sure it wouldn't have happened. Just hoping a bit. *shrug*
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Post by Angelica Vargas-Jones on Dec 19, 2011 1:58:45 GMT -5
There are going to be other things Angelica notices, but that's later when she's in the Red Queen's castle. Sorry. I though Vene was more like her father in the script, so he's the one that's not in this...*sheepish look* sorry.
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Post by Feliciano Vargas on Dec 19, 2011 2:54:50 GMT -5
No, it's not a problem! *nods* I was just wondering because in the movie I think there had been a flashback of Alice with her dad if I'm remembering correctly, though I'm starting to doubt that so I wasn't sure if you were going to have a moment like that or not.
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